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Academic -Report Writing [II]

WRITING TASK 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995- 2002.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

Write at least 150 words

A student wrote

The diagram below shows the total number of minutes of telephone calls in UK from 1995-2002 which is divided into three categories-local- fixed line, national and international-fixed line and mobiles.

In 1995, people in UK has spent 72 minutes ( in billions) on local fixed line calls whereas in 1998, after 3 years the total number of minutes of calls have been increased from 72 to 89 minutes( in billion)

National and international fixed line calls had dramatically increase from 1999 to 2002. In 1999, people in UK had spent 50 minutes ( in billions) whereas in 2002 it has been increased to 60 minutes (in billions).

From 1995-2002, minutes of mobile calls have been subsequently increasing from 2 minutes to 42 minutes.

Therefore, the total number of calls of local fixed line, national and international fixed line and mobiles have been increased from 1995-2002.

(145 words)

Band Score-5

Comments:

Below average

A Student wrote:

The bar chart demonstrates the amount of time spent by three types of phone calls in the United Kingdom between 1995 and 2002.

As can be seen from the graph, the time of local calls using fixed line was the highest over the period. The figure stood at just above 70 billion minutes in both 1995 and 2002. It is obvious that the upward trend was overtaken by a downward trend after 1999. The all-time high amount was 90 billion minutes, which was reached by local fixed line calls.

On the contrary, the other two categories both showed a trend of continuous increasing. National and international calls utilizing fixed line has climbed from around 39 billion in 1995 to roughly 60 billion in 2002. Although mobiles tended to be the least popular phoning device, the number of time has jumped to 40 billion in 2002.

To sum up, people in the UK preferred to use fixed line over cell phones. Moreover, the greatest number of phone calls during the seven years was occurred in the local area.

(177 words)

Band Score:8

Comments:

A very good answer

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Writing

Academic -Report Writing

WRITING TASK 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

A student wrote:

The two maps below show changes in an island before and after. Looking first at the one before construction we can see there is a huge island near a beach at west. The length of island is 100metres.

On the other hand the island after the construction has a lot of buildings. We can see large number of accommodations near the sea in the west and east. The accommodations are surrounded by footpath which goes to the swimming pool where tourists can enjoy swimming. There is a restaurant and a reception in the center of island surrounded by vehicle track which goes down to the pier where people can enjoy sailing.

Therefore, there are many changes which have occurred in these two diagrams.

(123 words)

Band score-4.5

Comments:

The word limit is less than required.(min 150 words)
Grammar is imperfect with the lexis part.
The overview is not appropriately selected
The sentence structure has to be well organized and defined.

A student wrote:

The given picture compares two stages of an island-before and after the construction for tourism. According to the map before construction, there were only a few trees and a beach which was not enough to facilitate the tourists. Therefore, most of the area of the island was empty. There wasn’t any special facility to provide to the tourists.

According to the map, after the construction, it can be seen very clearly that significant changes have been done to increase the attraction of island while trees and plants were not removed to establish an island for tourism.

Many facilities were established to provide the tourists like accommodation, restaurants, reception center, pier for boating, beach, footpaths and vehicle tracks. All the developments were made near the beach area.

Besides footpaths, were made to access the accommodation area and beach area while road tracks were made to drive through restaurants, reception center and pier for boating.

In conclusion, after construction the island got ready to provide numerous facilities to tourists. Furthermore, trees and plants were present to give pleasure to its tourists and not cutting them was a good idea for a tourist place like this island. The whole construction feels like has been made with a good planning.