IELTS Task 2 Essay writing [II]

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic:

The mark of a successful person is to be wealthy and have a successful career.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

A student wrote:

Many people argue that success in life is related to being rich and having a successful career. However, in my opinion, there are several other factors that have to be considered, as as I will now explain.

Primarily, the definition of success can be extremely controversial. There can be as many types of success in life as there are people. For example, the meaning of success for some people living in the countryside might be vastly different from these living in the big cities. In general, people in the countryside thrive for social respect, and family values rather than monetary accounts. They seem to be happier when they feel respected by their relatives, or their ideas are considered highly among their community.

Moreover, a considerable portion of people find their satisfaction in good education. They have eagerness to learn and gain more knowledge. They believe that knowledge is power and a way to lighten their minds and lives. To illustrate, many scientists have devoted their lives in research to make a discovery or an invention, and even thought these people did not have luxurious lives, not many can argue that they were not successful.

Furthermore, in many cases, we judge others by their outside appearance; that they are successful because they own, for example, a big house, an expensive car, or a good business. But owning these items would not always make them feel successful unless for instant, their family life is stable, their health is in good shape, or they really feel satisfied with what they have.

To conclude, I believe that there are many factors that should be taken into account besides wealth and successful career before judging that a person is really successful in his life.

(289 words)

Band score: 7.5