Academic -Report Writing

WRITING TASK 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

A student wrote:

The two maps below show changes in an island before and after. Looking first at the one before construction we can see there is a huge island near a beach at west. The length of island is 100metres.

On the other hand the island after the construction has a lot of buildings. We can see large number of accommodations near the sea in the west and east. The accommodations are surrounded by footpath which goes to the swimming pool where tourists can enjoy swimming. There is a restaurant and a reception in the center of island surrounded by vehicle track which goes down to the pier where people can enjoy sailing.

Therefore, there are many changes which have occurred in these two diagrams.

(123 words)

Band score-4.5

Comments:

The word limit is less than required.(min 150 words)
Grammar is imperfect with the lexis part.
The overview is not appropriately selected
The sentence structure has to be well organized and defined.

A student wrote:

The given picture compares two stages of an island-before and after the construction for tourism. According to the map before construction, there were only a few trees and a beach which was not enough to facilitate the tourists. Therefore, most of the area of the island was empty. There wasn’t any special facility to provide to the tourists.

According to the map, after the construction, it can be seen very clearly that significant changes have been done to increase the attraction of island while trees and plants were not removed to establish an island for tourism.

Many facilities were established to provide the tourists like accommodation, restaurants, reception center, pier for boating, beach, footpaths and vehicle tracks. All the developments were made near the beach area.

Besides footpaths, were made to access the accommodation area and beach area while road tracks were made to drive through restaurants, reception center and pier for boating.

In conclusion, after construction the island got ready to provide numerous facilities to tourists. Furthermore, trees and plants were present to give pleasure to its tourists and not cutting them was a good idea for a tourist place like this island. The whole construction feels like has been made with a good planning.